[Wojtek]

OK Kirk

If you're posting this all let me comment. Starting point is good but how about making this more calm and 'poetic' by smaller pallette of colours in the text.

I don't want to 'gatecrash' into your imagination and artistic vision. Just small comments

Here is rough version of what I suggest. We can't use this image but creating it I wanted to show and suggest more subdued text.